Q 8 (b) The recent cyclone in the states of West Bengal and Odisha highlight the need for India to have dedicated funds which can be used to rebuild areas destroyed during national calamities.
As Devesh/Devika, write a letter in 100-120 words to the editor of a national daily drawing attention of the authorities towards the need for a Natural Calamity Fund. Give suggestions on how funds for the same must be collected and how they must be utilised during natural calamities.
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648 Ranjeet enclave
Deep Nagar
New Delhi
2xx2x1
January 21 , 2021
The Editor
The Times of India
New Delhi
2xx1x2
Subject- Natural calamity fund
Respected Sir
Through the columns of your esteemed newspaper I would like to draw your attention and the attention of the concerned authorities towards the destruction caused by the cyclone in the states of odissa and West Bengal.
The recent cyclone has left the people of odissa and west Bengal devastated. People are starving to death and their situation is worsening day by day . To help them , natural calamity fund has to be arranged. This would finance the rescue of the people from those areas and would be taken to a safe natural calamity help shelters. Further, the money of the fund should be invested to provide good quality of food to the affected people of west Bengal and Orissa . Medical assistance should be provided to the people by the help of the funds and the government.
The concerned authorities such as the NGOs and the government should gather fund and advertise in the television to spread awareness about the need to donate for the same. It’s the need of the hour and the call of humanity to help the people affected by the cyclone in Bengal and Odisha .
Yours Sincerely
Devika
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3. In the body part- 1st paragraph is perfect.
4. In the 2nd paragraph, which is the main part, you have to write why there is a need for the calamity fund.
5. What was wrong in your answer? You have explained the loss caused by the cyclone- but, the examiner expects you to write the benefits of calamity fund.
6. In the third paragraph- suggest them the ways to collect funds from- for example – big business houses or the state/central government.
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648 Ranjeet enclave
Deep Nagar
New Delhi
January 14, 2021
The Editor
The Times of India
Dear Sir,
Subject-The need for a national calamity fund
Through the columns of your newspaper, I would like to draw your attention of the concerned authorities towards the need for a national calamity fund which can be used to rebuild the areas destroyed due to cyclone destruction in West Bengal and Odisha.
The recent cyclone has caused threats and damage to various parts of West Bengal and Odisha. People are striving with hunger and poverty. Houses have been destroyed badly and the death rate has increased heavily. The dead bodies are spread on each street giving an unpleasant look. This recent cyclone has created a feeling of terror and awe in the minds of common people. Damage on a large scale has been caused to personal property.
I request the authority to collect the dedicated funds which can be used to rebuild the destroyed areas. I hope this letter would find a suitable place in your newspaper and I also request the concerned authorities to pay attention as quickly as possible.
Yours Scincerly
Devika
Error analysis:
1st line- ‘draw THE attention of the concerned’
2nd paragraph- and a large number of people died. We write the death rate when we are comparing data of more than one year. Here you are talking about a particular year.
Spelling of Sincerely
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