On this page, students can find out the common mistakes in Analytical Paragraph writing. The analytical paragraph is a new topic that was added to CBSE class 10 English to improve students’ analytical skills. But due to a lack of proper guidance and knowledge, some common errors in the analytical paragraph were observed by essayshout teachers and have been presented here for you to learn from others’ mistakes.
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- Talking about the introduction first- do not write the word ‘above or below’ in the answer.
- When you are writing about a range of years, you can’t use ‘in’. Instead write ‘from or across’.
- The colour of the bars is not to be mentioned while writing an analytical paragraph. It’s for you to observe the graph.
- ‘purchasing of the computer’- your sentence making is wrong. Write correct and meaningful sentences.
- ‘Smartphones THEN computers’ while comparing two objects use the correct word- than.
- than- तुलना में and then- तब
- ‘snap up of computers’- I could not understand this line.
- Do not use personal pronouns- I, we etc.
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Learn from others’ mistakes and score full marks while writing analytical paragraph answers.
- The word count is less than required. You must write between 100 and 120 words.
- It’s not RISHINAGAR; correct is RISHUNAGAR.
- ‘suddenly dropped sharply’, suddenly is not the right word here and its spelling is also incorrect.
- Do not give space before putting a comma. A comma is put directly after the word.
- ‘a increase’ is wrong, it must be written as ‘an increase’.
- Abbreviations can be accepted in Maths but not in English. Never write i.e. or e.g. etcetera in English exam.
- Bhumika just wrote the general analysis. Include some statistics like, rose by 10% or reduced by half.
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Q. A SURVEY WAS CONDUCTED IN THE NATIONAL CAPITAL IN OVER TWENTY SCHOOLS ABOUT THE DIFFERENT ACTIVITIES THAT INTEREST THE CHILDREN IN THE AGE GROUP OF 13 YEARS TO 15 YEARS.
The given bar graph illustrates the interests of children belonging to the age group of 13–15 years.
According to the given graph, majority of the children favor music the most (60%). Cricket is favored by 40% of the children, making it the second most favorite activity. After cricket, 35% of children are interested in theatre activity which makes it the third most liked activity among the children. Both dance and art activities are on equal level making it a draw. Around 25% of children favor dancing and art, which is among the least in comparison to the other three.
Overall, music is considered the most favoring activity among the children. The following can be serialized in descending order – Music, Cricket, Theatre, Dance, and Art.
Error Analysis –
You would get 5 out of 5 marks for it.
A survey was conducted in the National Capital, in over twenty schools, about the
different activities that interest the children in the age group of 13 years to 15 years.
Write a paragraph in about 100-120 words, analyzing the following information.
The given graph sketches out the information about a survey conducted in the National Capital in over twenty schools, about the different activities that interest the children in the age group of 13 years to 15 years. It is being observed that the majority students are interested in music over other activities. It gains interest of 60 children which is even higher than the children opting dance and art put together. Second major activity of interest is Cricket which accounts two-third of the children who prefer music that is 40. Further, cricket is followed by theatre with an insignificant difference of 5 as it gains interest of 35 children. Moving ahead, children who prefer dance is as much as the number of children who prefer art as their interest and this accounts a quarter of children that is 25. In a nutshell, children in the age group of 13 years to 15 years are interested more in creative activities like music and theatre. Moreover, sports like cricket is also a significant choice of children. These are followed by dance and art.
Error Analysis:
At first glance, your answer seemed long, it came out to be 181 words in the word count.
The introduction and body parts are nicely written, but the conclusion should be short.
You have a good command of the English language. Good Luck!
The graph shows that the number of student of class 10th speaking English and Hindi different schools of New Delhi that’s clearly shows that the there are more number of his Hindi speaking students studies in Government schools and in KVS .Government schools only 10% of students speak English and about 35% of students speak Hindi in contrast the students of private schools about 30% of students speak Hindi in private school majority for English speaking student is more. In KVS most of the students speak Hindi but compared to government school it’s less. English speaking students in KVS about 25% and Hindi speaking students are high as compared to private schools totally 20% of students speak Hindi in KVS .
on comparing data of all three schools Government schools at the Hai Hindi spoken students and private schools have high English spoken students and the students of KVS Har roughly average
A lot of mistakes in sentence formation.
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The given bar graph illustrate a comparative study on the student performance before the terminal examination the study reveals the variation in the student performance in term 1 and term 2 the student secure the highest mark in maths both in term 1 and term 2 on the contrary secure the lowest mark in English among all the separate there is required increase in the percentile while the percentage decreased in Hindi in conclusion there is need of more efforts language subject like Hindi and English to improve the overall percentile
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The given two charts reveal the contribution of different sectors of the Indian economy from 2010 to 2020.
A significant increase in the contribution to the economy is seen in sectors such as education , trade , hospitals and building.
In contrast with the increase in the contribution of different sectors some striking distinctions are also presented . Contribution of production sector declined from 12% in 2010 to 11% in 2020.
Overall , agriculture dropped down to just 12% in 2020 from 25% in 2010. Whereas finance sector showed a similar trend in its contribution.
Error Analysis:
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The given chart represents the number of digital devices i.e., smartphones and computers purchased in Rishunagar from 2015 till 2019.
The number of devices purchased are represented in thousands across the Y- axis of the graph.
It can be observed that the number of devices bought annually has steadily increased when the figures of 2015 and 2019 are compared.
Also, the number of smartphones are more preferred over computers ,except in the year 2017 when the sale of computers outnumbered the sale of smartphones by 10,000 in number.
It can also be deduced that the annual sales of the devices in 2018 had caused a steep fall in the increasing trend but however was unaffected due to the boom in sales of the devices during 2019.
Therefore, the data is reflective of the changing patterns of preferences between computers and smartphones.
Error Analysis:
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2. You need not mention that Y-axis line.
3. Conclusion is impressive.
The given bar graph shows the data about the number of digital devices purchased in Rishunagar across the years 2015-2019 . It is clearly understood that the people have preferred handy smartphones to computers except for the year 2017 where the computer sales were more by only 10000 purchases . The least number of total devices were purchased in the year 2015 which were 83,000 compared to the highest purchases in 2019 which were 200,000 .
There has been an increase in the total devices till 2017 but it is succeeded with drastic downfall in 2018 from 164,000 to 122,000 devices . The purchases again started to gather pace by 2019 leading with smartphones again on top . It is concluded that in these 5 years, the total sale of smartphones is more than that of computers .
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This graph provides the information about the no. of digital devices purchased in Rishunagar across the years 2015-2019.
The graph illustrates that the no. of computers purchased was approximately 38 thousand while the no. of smartphones purchased was just above 40 thousand .there was rise in no. of computers purchased between the year 2015-2017,which then fluctuated between the year 2017-2019.The no. of smartphones purchased gradually increased during the years 2015-2017,and fall in the year 2018 and rose up to slightly above 1 lakh. The no. of smartphones purchased were always greater than computers purchased except in the year 2017.The maximum no.of both mobiles ad computers were purchased in the year 2019 while minimum no. of smartphones and computers were purchased in the year 2015.
In the nutshell, it can be concluded that along with the passage of time there is greater need for mobiles and computers because of increase in technolgy.
Error Analysis:
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2. Conclusion needs correction.
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